Take Five

posted February 14th, 2014, 12:40 pm


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February 14th, 2014, 12:43 pm

Rakewn

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Aaand thats the end of this arc. The grumpy cat poster is there to add some extra flair to an otherwise very uneventful chapter.

Thank you all for reading, and Happy Valentine's Day to those who celebrate it!

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February 14th, 2014, 1:37 pm

passerby (Guest)

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Yup, that sure was uneventful. My heart didn't jump up into my throat at any point in it, nope.

In all seriousness though, this is probably my favourite chapter yet. You handled it very well; Louie's change of mind could of gone wrong narratively in so many ways, but I believed it all the way. Fantastic job.

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February 14th, 2014, 2:22 pm

BurstThrough

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@Rakewn: It had one event but a long dreaded and expected event and you also showed that Elis doesn't have that good of a school life.

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February 14th, 2014, 2:51 pm

Mokajing

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awww this cuties

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February 14th, 2014, 6:42 pm

imightbeapanda

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THEY ARE HOLDING HANDS
THAT'S SO CUTE
and I agree with Passerby... uneventful my ass

I absolutely love this story, I would totally buy the book if there was one available...

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February 14th, 2014, 10:50 pm

That purple monster

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Dear god, I loved this chapter QwQ

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February 14th, 2014, 11:11 pm

Doodlebot117

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Not to minimize Ellis' problems, because everyone's problems seem ghastly huge to them and are challenges for a reason, but I think he just got a refresher on Chip's hard times and Family Woes and that kind of put things in perspective. So he's like 'Yeah, I'm fine. No one lit my temporary housing on fire while I was still in it.'

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February 16th, 2014, 5:33 pm

Charlotte057

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GRUMPY CAT :0

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February 17th, 2014, 12:15 am

KariRedlock

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uguuuu i love these two ;u; they're so cute and supportive of each other 8D stay strong you guys! think of grumpy cat and be happy

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February 17th, 2014, 2:55 am

Guest

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I love how Noah kept getting interrupted a majority of this arc.

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February 19th, 2014, 2:18 pm

Rakewn

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@passerby: aahh thank you! I was definitely worried about how to handle Louie's change of mind here, so I'm happy to hear it was believable!
@imightbeapanda: thank you! unfortunately i don't know how likely a book would be, but maybe someday ??
@That purple monster: thank you!!

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February 20th, 2014, 8:37 pm

Angelz_Blaze

We'll done, good sir. :D

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In any case, it originally sounded and seems like Louie's little brother is being hunted down by someone which is why Louie is so protective. But I too think his actions matched how he should react if hes conflicted with emotions of making sure his lil bro is somewhere he can be safe and happy, over the alternative of being locked away in a false world.

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March 12th, 2014, 3:04 pm

SadButTrue00

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they should just date already

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April 2nd, 2014, 5:13 pm

Koori

Noah's faces though

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Close your mouth, Noah. You'll catch flies.

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April 23rd, 2014, 10:10 am

Silaya Arctic Prower

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I see grumpy cat back there...

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June 12th, 2016, 8:51 pm

Genocide (Guest)

CUTIES

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Can we just talk about that hand holding

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